This is my best friend’s life. She was the one, only one for me. We were born together, raised together. I did whatever she asked. She started influencing me so much that She became Me and I became her.
One day, something went wrong. A lucky star was watching over us but then it’s done a bunk. Our desires, hopes, likes started separating from each other. My love her lust, my needs her greed, my strength her shortcuts. She wanted me to be her puppet, so became I. She made me lie. I betrayed, took drastic actions and devilish decisions. She was getting on my nerves slowly and slowly.
And one day she asked me to kick my Love out of my life. Then only I dared to argue her and to change my plight. I asked her not to keep her hopes too high.
She said “He is no more suitable for you”
I asked her “Why”
“Not a penny more out of penny less.. Never pass a good thing darling, when you see it. You must move forward” Was her reply.
I said that sort of thinking can get you into the mess. It’s high time that you should just Buzz off. That was the first time I showed up courage and took my stand. By now, I realized that might never make right. I was watching her turning cloudy and even little thunderous. Tears welled up in my eyes.
She was standing right in front of me and suddenly started disappearing like the dew of early morning. It was an hour of reflection when we lost our affection. She was gone forever. No more I could listen to her, no more she was my shadow.
Yes, She was nobody else but My Inner Soul, My Devil Soul.
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I know this is fiction, but girl relationships do go through stages. You described it well and the pictures you chose go with the piece perfectly. Nice job.
Thank you for your meaningful comment. Glad you liked it.
That is a magical narration, Falak, of struggles and eventual victory over your inner demons. It is a misnomer to call it ‘inner soul’, as the soul is unchanging and eternal even as we pass through our transient existence here.
I am glad you appreciate it. Thank you for adding meaningful words here.
Hey I would like to know where we can talk .I mean on which media ??
You can send me your query through My Contact form on my website…
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Excellent read, I love it!
Thank you
So Honest ❤️
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Keep writing. That was touching.
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This one was quite strong on how our dwelling inner negativity can affect us if we don’t show courage to fight it.
I really liked it.
Glad you liked it so much☺
Very cool – great twist at the end!!!! Enjoyed your writing immensely!!!!!!
M glad you liked it. Hope you’ll like my posts in future too.
I have no doubt at all, that I will!!!!
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There’s a lot of depth to your writing. I like it how you led us up the garden path with this one then twisted the tale at the end. I’m glad you managed to defeat whatever part of yourself was holding you back from a relationship
Thank you. Glad you liked it
That is an amazing story of how you and tour bad soul was close and you ended.All humans have that lower self who.Its not good to have at all.Nice Thumbs up
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Thank you for sharing as well keep them coming .
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Hi Whitney you can text me on fb, insta, twitter anywhere you want.
” I was watching her turning cloudy and even little thunderous. Tears welled up in my eyes.’ I Really loved this particular imagery.. very nice emotional piece…..drama without melodrama!!
I am glad you appreciate my writing. Many thanks for visiting my blog and for your comment. I hope to see you around always.
Wow, mind-blown! Beautifully expressed, exquisite piece of writing. I recognize writing talent when I see it, and you’ve definitely got it! 😊😊
Thank you for your wonderful comment. I am glad you liked it.
It seems English isn’t your first language and that makes the phrasing a tad different and so very refreshing. The poetry in your writing makes this piece all the more beautiful.
So glad you got rid of that nasty demon…no need for friends like that 🙂
Yes, In India English is the second official language but still not prevalent in all the States here and Hindi is our native as well as first language. Thanks for your comment. Hope to see you around in future.
Wise words,
A beautiful personification of inner conflict 🙂
I appreciate your comment
I have been to the dark side. No place to be. I’ll never go back. Thank you for your post. Kevin
Hey Kevin, we all learn from our mistakes.. And I think this is the best way to learn…
This is a really interesting piece. The way you combine ideas into your sentences seems fresh.
Many thanks for your lovely comment
We don’t know what we are capable of until we try to master it, it’s the art of mastery that we use to defeat the darkness in us! It would be cool to have a feedback on mine too. Thank you, your mind is a rainbow
I forgot to add, thank you for liking my poems!
I read, a fine metaphor of fighting yourself to become who you really are.
Many thanks for yoUr meaningful comment
I came across this post because you had liked a comment I had made on another post, quite a while ago, so I wanted to see what your blog is about… I was blown away with both your writing and the message!
You handled the message very delicately and in a very believable way! Kudos! Like you said in one of the comments, not many people are able to recognize or conquer their inner demons! Bravo!
I decided to follow you to see other gems! I’m very pleased that you decided to follow me in return! Thank you!
Peace, Tamara
Thank you very much Tamara for your wonderful comment. I am glad that you had a look at one of my best pieces.. I am linking a post url here.. https://talkaholicme.wordpress.com/2016/09/06/a-dream/
Hope you will like it too. And now coming back to your comment, I love meeting new people here on WP and I was lucky i met you.
Bonjour ou bonsoir
Ce jour au soir deux étoiles
Vont tomber du ciel
Une sera remplit de sagesse
L’autre sera chargé de tendresse
Au loin dans le ciel une brille , celle de notre pacte d’amitié
Je te souhaite une merveilleuse journée ou soirée
Tiens au passage je te chante une mélodie , celle de mon cœur
Bisous , Bernard
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Bonjour Bernard
Ravi de vous rencontrer
je vous remercie pour le merveilleux poème et fleurs
Je traduis le poème en anglais afin que mes autres collègues blogueurs peuvent le lire aussi
Translation of the poem sent above by Bernard:
good morning or good evening
That day the two evening stars
Will fall from the sky
One is filled with wisdom
The other will be responsible for tenderness
Far away in the sky shines, of our friendship pact
I wish you a wonderful day or evening
Like the way I sing a melody, that my heart
Kisses, Bernard
I knew it was you the whole time:)
For I know that in me (that is, in my flesh) nothing good dwells; for to will is present with me, but how to perform what is good I do not find. 19 For the good that I will to do, I do not do; but the evil I will not to do, that I practice. 20 Now if I do what I will not to do, it is no longer I who do it, but sin that dwells in me.
21 I find then a law, that evil is present with me, the one who wills to do good. 22 For I delight in the law of God according to the inward man. 23 But I see another law in my members, warring against the law of my mind, and bringing me into captivity to the law of sin which is in my members. 24 O wretched man that I am! Who will deliver me from this body of death? 25 I thank God—through Jesus Christ our Lord!
So then, with the mind I myself serve the law of God, but with the flesh the law of sin.
You explained it so well and now may be we know your age as well.. Correct me if I am not? And my friend I would love to tell you that I wrote this thing many years back when I was in my graduation.. Few days back I got it in my old diary.. In my blog you will find a lot of depressing as well as inspiring writeup’s but they all are simply fiction except few
My age? LOL I am 49, just a youngster:) Yes , I myself will write a story that is fiction but based on my own experiences. It spices the story up but keeps me at a safe distance, lol.
Really glad to meet you.. keep in touch
And I am honored to meet you as well! I shall, I shall:)
Excellent post and thank you for the follow. It’s nice to meet you.
Nice to meet you too my friend
I can totally relate to this, great post! 🙂
Many thanks
Thank you for ‘liking’ one of my responses. This post can be likened to the Taoism and Confucianism concept of Yin and Yang, that is, that every good/positive element has a touch of the dark side and every bad/negative element has a bit of good in it. With that in mind, could it be said that even someone like Mother Teresa had a touch of the dark side in her? May the force be with you! Lol!
Yin and Yang, apparently opposite or interconnected, and interdependent on each other.. I appreciate your comment.. Hey you reminded me of my one poem which is related to the same concept.. hope you’ll like it https://talkaholicme.wordpress.com/2016/08/05/he-she/
Ah, yes. I nice twist of a story. In the beginning, I truly believed this was a tale of friendship gone bad. The shadow side of ourselves is a tricky thing to imagine/fight/write about. Good job!
Thank you very much.. I am glad you liked it
Been there
And definitely have done this
Life lessons are very hard to learn
As always sheldon
Many thanks for your meaningful comment
What a beautiful way to portray the struggle of the soul. I have gone through a very similar story more than once. I believe these banished devils can come back. If they cannot beat us when we’re strong, their game is to weary and weaken us, hoping they can take us over in the end.
I totally agree with you.. We must be ready always to face circumstances.. Thank you for your wonderful comment
Sometimes you have to face your inner demons and cast them out.
Many thanks for your meaningful comment
Oh, that was breath takingly beautiful!
Many thanks victoria
Aah, our dark side. Very interesting narration indeed!
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Thank you for liking my blog. I would love for you to follow it as it is a continuing story ……
Okay.. Let’s Be in touch then .. It’s nice to meet you and very interesting to read your grandfather’s diary..
Poignant piece and all of us have this inner devil that works against us we just need to get better at not listening to it.
The inner evil that lives inside each of us and how we have to overcome it before it takes over the essence of our being…nice write-up, I enjoyed every bit of it.
Thank you very much Elizabeth for your meaningful comment.. be in touch
Yeah.she is it devil soul n inner soul by she is defeated d chess of love n as defeating u will be winner forever coz it heart has a lot of feelings of love.
Well said
Yeah.
Really superb writing! Loved reading this…. a lot…. you are a star…. photos cute too. You took them? Xx
Oh thanks a ton.. I Am so pleased☺☺
gREAT POST.
Thanks
You deserve kisses and hugs…. I love this piece.
Oh I am alright with praises.. no kisses or hugs..lol
Anyways thanks a ton.. I am glad you loved it
U are welcome
Excellent piece.
Thanks
The writing was beautiful, I love it~
Thank you.. I am glad you enjoyed it
I liked the way you kept her identity concealed till the end and also that it talked about how good/bad both resides in everyone. But it’s the choices you make that determines the kind of person you’d be, good or bad?☺ Utterly beautiful☺
Thanks for defining the crux of my writeup so beautifully.. I am glad you liked it and agree with what I have said..
Great idea how you look at inner voices and how you orchestrate these inner dialogues. All the best!!
Thank you
Bonsoir prends le temps
D’aimer,de rire,de pleurer
De lire , d’écouter l’intelligence
De penser ,de jouer cela rappelle notre enfance
De rêver , surtout de vivre car le temps passe vite
Et surtout le bonheur d avoir des amis ou amies
Je te souhaite une belle journée , une belle fin de semaine
Belle semaine aussi à tes amis et amies , à ta famille et tous ceux qui de l importance pour toi
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Gros bisous.
Bernard
One fifth in, I knew it was you being referred to. Well you did a great job, your skill is improving. Before you get nasty on me (as usual) you were always outstanding. There, feel better knucklehead? Now what’s next, will you fight with me today, better not.
But there is a lot here which you have brought forth from this subject matter. Ha
Haha..you are a good predictor.. Congo.. And ah! I don’t fight. .. I am so nice.. I am glad you liked my piece of art. .. Did I inspire you again for any series anyway?
First; You inspired a smile (ha) and the thought did cross my mind, yes, but not defined yet.
Lastly; that pretty girl in the photo, that surely cannot be you (here I am trying to get your attention now (ha).
Lol.
Hey I might go back to the romantic love article.
See you soon, at any rate.
Haha.. Unluckily the girl in that round mirror is me.. argh😟
So, you self deprecate, huh! Well (please don’t mind me saying…) that is the practice of a human’s weights and measures; A Duality. An attempt to create a balance, a fail safe device which aids us to come in under the radar. Actually a device employed by the Obscurity Seeker among us. One who is not comfortable with praise, attention.
By now you should know that I’m fond of your friendship so don’t get crazy on me as is your wont (inclination) to debate and contradict me. I don’t mind, really our battles.
You made fun of me when I said something to the effect of being a Guru in India (“What will you teach”; meaning I had nothing to teach, I understand you mischievous girl). But any way if you have a interest in reading about the two kinds of people in the world (Obscurity Seeker and Celebrity Seeker) just dig through my old blogs, the blogs of this dude who has nothing to say (teach).
Bless you.
Haha.. it’s human nature to say opposite of what we mean. . And I am really funny sometimes, so dont ever mind If I make stupid PJs (poor jokes). And next thing, I love to have conversation with you.. I enjoy our talks and okays one day I’ll go through your old posts.. guess the bird is nearby…
Awesome response. You are right in this (and many other things, can’t give you too much credit, your head will explode). Yes we do say, often the opposite of what we feel. Wow, you are a smart little one. Huh….
Where will I hide, huh
What about hiding in Ac ducts? 😕😅
Only in the movies
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Wow, powerful post on kicking our inner critic to the curb. That voice that offers self doubt, and wants us to stay small. Very moving.
well said.. I am glad you liked my post.. I just tried to write what I went through and i am happy for the ending.
She’s so pretty
Thank you.. 😄😄
Very neat concept. 🙂 A good lesson for unwanted second thoughts!
Thanks
sad but true..we nevr listen ourselves
We must look at the both sides of coin always..
Yes true my friend
A winning fight with your self thats a wonderfully peened..
Amazing! I’ve written something similar…pls check it out when you find the time: https://teenmemoir.com/2016/08/29/the-monster-in-the-mirror/
Noticed that you had liked my sunshine blogger award post… but for some complications I deleted that post and posted a new one….pls do check it out here when you find the time: https://teenmemoir.com/2016/09/17/the-sunshine-blogger-award/
Done.. Thanks for sharing mirror post with me.. You wrote it so well.. Nice going
Thank you…and thank you for taking the time to read it…😊
☺ anytime
Really good.. And so real
Indeed it is real
Great read! The finish line brings it to the climax. Thank you. Have a wonderful weekend! 🙂
Thank you for your wishes.. Umm my weekends are usually very boring and yes I have to complete my draft on it. Thanks for reminding me..
I was not really reminding about completing it. I was referring to the last sentence of the post that made the story so unique!
Yea I kNow that.. you did it incidentally.. rofl
Yes try it..and do correct your problem.. I have to go to spam folder everytime to approve your messages.. Try complaining on WP
Deep emotions.
😊
Well written. Reminds me of https://explicitwriters.wordpress.com/2016/08/02/shadow/
Thank you for sharing this post with me.. I find it so same and beautiful
You’re welcome… was written in anticipation of yours 🙂
I can’t make my mind up whether this is actually a best friend or the changes gone through yourself. It reminds me of my old ‘friend’ she used to emotionally abuse me ,call me names , push me downstairs. I thought this was normal until a couple of years later until I told her I didn’t want to be friends anymore and she stalked my facebook profile leaving nasty comments.
Very good post
~SS
This world is full of people like your old friend.. Glad you got rid of her.. such people and entities make life miserable
She (when I knew her), turned out to be trans so I suppose it was the frustration X
~SS
So deep! Interesting read
Thank you Chloe.. I am glad you liked it
We all have this duality goin on I rekcon. Some hide it better than others. Mine tries to make me laugh at inappropriate moments, which is underhand.
Being of dual nature or double standard is something which we all inherit within us.. Though Very few accept the fact
Exactly. I meant to add I liked how you made it seem like this was a separate person adn the surprise at the end. It made me think how this applies to myself. So nice writing.
Thank you very much.. One thing I haven’t told anyone.. I wrote it three years back when I was doing my post-graduation..
😉 Your secret’s safe with me … “Hey everyone – guess what!…”
Haha.. yea .. 😜
Lovely.
Thanks
Most Welcome.
Falak dear this is lovely. Liked this “My love- her lust, my need- her greed, my strength- her shortcuts” very good writing. Am looking for your posts in the reader.
In your mouth Butter and Sugar.. Thank you very much.. ☺
Beautifully described……
Thanks
Wow. You nailed it in the end.👍👍👍
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Some times we can be our own worst enemy.
Yes, thouGH it takes a lot of courage to see the devil within us
You telling me… Lol
Wondering about your story
Tell me what would you like to know?
When you said you telling me LOL, u sounded like you are very experienced in this respect of mine post.. Would love to hear your side of story in short or may be in post some day
To answer your question about me relating to your earlier post. I must refer to the bible when it says that what I’m supposed to do is that I do not do, but that which I’m not supposed to do is that which I do. Early on in my life I stayed in trouble and although today I have my own business I still fight with my past. The voices in our head tells us some time to do bad and good things. We must choose between the two. I choose to do good but it wasn’t always like that. But you get my meaning if not just let me know.
Oh the Bible reference is just so perfect.. We all human beings are a bag of mistakes.. we do what we are not supposed to do. And yes I am still firm on my point we must fight the Battle within our self..
Yes… It seems to be working with you. I like that the bible excites you.
Amazing loved your inner devil soul and that is the real one to fight. Perfect emotions.
Thank you for your comment Kamal..
Incredible … could relate with every word of what you said .. its soo true . Loved this post !!:)
Thanks.. keep reading my posts in future.. 😄
Beautiful emotions…..
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YE kya thnkyou bhi nahi or meri wali poem me cmment bhi nahi…”so rude”hindi bhashi hone ke kaaran mere saath bhedbhaw ho raha hai…😂😂😂😂😂
Maine comment islie nahi kia qki mai funny comment krti Jo shayad tmhe pasand na ata.. kahin TM bura na mano islie ni kia..samjhe
Are devi ji kr dete..bichari post ka khata khul jata…aap mere cmmmnt bhi to dekho wo kaunsa seerious hote he…😂😂😂
Lol OK OK don’t cry..I will
M not crying😈..its jst a kind of invitation to read on your fvrt topic😜
Lol
Nice
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. . . Beautiful.
Ty
The eternal fight with self.
Well written.
Thank you
Loved it. Our inner ‘devil’soul sometimes becomes very overpowering and nothing but sheer courage can get rid of it
And it is very important to win the battle within our soul
Very true ☺
WOW! It was really well written.
Thanks moushmi
wow..I loved every word of it..
Thank you
Its touch my heart 😊😊
I am glad ☺
Yha this is true he never lie u i love your concept 😊😊😊😊
Thank you
Fight against your inner soul..
Fought it.. Won it.. thanks
Deep and nicely crafted 🙂
Thank you very much
Beautiful
Thanks
I absolutely loved it! Letting the dark side win is the start of destruction!
Well said..
The conversation with the other side of you is a constant battle. Whoever wins controls you. It is a challenge to ensure the right side wins.
Nicely written.
Yes it was a battle of soul with soul.. Thank you for your comment
This is just awesome.. awesome read. I will be reblogging it soon.
Thank you
conquering your darker side Is the most cherised victory
Yes and surprisingly very few are able to do that
Yes dear 🙂 thats trur
Reblogged this on Incredible Pie and commented:
Not ‘just another best friend!!’
Haha Thank you so much..
That is awesome!! 👍😣
This is incredible! Love it! 🙂 🙂
Thank you
We need to conquer the dark side of us at one point or another.
Well said..otherwise we would become our own puppet
Hey, no second thought on this being awesome but did you posted this about 19 hr ago? 😐
Yup I did.. why
Just asking that you posted same post twice. 🙂
Your comments are still going in my spam folder.. I don’t know why.. and oh no.. just publish your post again by hitting publish immediately and you’ll get your answer
I should publish again. OK I will and see what happens.
Yes you will.. and do correct your problem asap.. I have to go to spam folder everytime to approve your messages.. try complaining at WP
Complained to them. Don’t know where’s the problem lying.
This happened with some other users also. You will have to go to the spam folder and mark my comment as not spam and then go to the pending section to approve my comment. Hopefully, it will get solved by that way. Still I have contacted WordPress about it but the guys have some meet and are busy.
I love the concept.
Thanks gagan
A situation everyone in his life has experienced some time or other….nicely conceptualised though…keep posting
Thanks